The day was supposed to be joyful. The big day party was about to begin and the boats were arriving full of guests. All seemed well and excitement was in the air.
Then suddenly, as the gates were about to open so the festivities could start, a scream was heard coming from the house. There was a BANG! Everyone looked at the house and they saw it.
The house had been marked! The front wall that was all bright white until a minute ago, had the creepy red mark now.
The guests turned, went back to their boats and started to sail away.
It’s not wise to be for too long in the shadows of the red mark.
The party was over!
This post was written in response to this week’sĀ Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writer , with photo prompt by Louise from the Storyteller’s Abode, and contains 122 words.
To read other stories inspired by the picture above, click the blue frog below.
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LOL! I didn’t even notice the red mark above the door until I read your story. Great story! I wonder what the red mark is for? Thank you for participating in Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers Challenge. š
Oh, it was the first thing I noticed. Very disruptive in the white wall… ;o)
When you pointed it out and I saw it I couldn’t believe I had missed it.
Love it. I saw the red mark and thought about writing it in but went with something else so glad to see someone went with it.
I couldn’t resist š
I love the way you incorporated the red mark (I think its an alarm/ security device) as a warning sign. Good story!
I didn’t notice the red mark either. Spooky. š
I can’t believe I didn’t notice that mark! You did a great job making it seem mysterious and dangerous. It reminds me a bit of the black spot from Treasure Island.
Hum. Have to read Treasure Island now… Thanks ;o)
Great story. I wonder what is so bad about the red mark? What does it mean the people have done?
Ooh, interesting hints about something quite sinister. What happens to houses that have the red mark, I wonder? And how do they get them? Sounds like the premise to a very scary story!
Great take on the prompt. The boats do look like everyone is moving away. Creative idea using the red mark…and now there unanswered questions!
Your eyes are much better than mine. I missed the red mark. Loved how you used that as the premise for your story. š
Wonderful way of expressing a story. The red mark, I really like to know more about it š
Thanks all for the comments so far.
As for what does the mark means, that will have to remain a mistery (even for me!). At least for now. Maybe I can try to develop the story and reveal the meaning of the mark (once I figure it out myself! ;o)
Ooh – very intriguing. I want to know more about this red mark! Good story. š
Really enjoyed reading your story. Very classy!
So, there’s something significant about being branded with a red mark. It seems the house is now doomed to ill-fate. I like the idea of that very much, and the way you made the burglar alarm into that dreaded stigma. A clever story, Etol and well written, too. š
You are a party hater…..nice take on the prompt.
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